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Always dressed, without fail, in his best, it is the Snail.

Lacking gender, call it He - Hermaphrodite variety! The snails are what they need to be, happy in equality. At the headline of society, the subject of great enmity - at the envy of the lower bug, the Snail does not mention the Slug.

Ever at home to friendly callers - in his castle dome, that grows yet taller - lives the gentleman with long, stalked eyes, his expression of polite surprise.

A pacifist he, the subject of this rhyme - he'd never kill, nor conceal the crime. Indeed, he can't - he leaves a trail - evidence leading to the Snail.

At rest, or when feeding, the best place to dwell, playing chess or when reading, he's blessed with his shell. Starting pale and soft as flesh, a slender veil, delicate mesh - with age we see the touch of karma, a harmless beast is given armour.

Indeed, he could hardly be calmer - a herbivore - of leaves a farmer. Too calm, one might say to the point of harm - for than the snail, no-one is slower... of particular consequence, in the path of a mower.

Prudent, readily prepared - knowing in the long-run, none are spared, this gentleman, in lacking bones - leaves a grander (by far!) gravestone.

... excepting that most tragic end, being brittle/lacking bend - of all, the worst, I'm sure you feel - is to burst beneath your heel. What a way, in what a world.. Innocent, in spiral curled, only to be crushed to mince, the sound alone will make you wince. Ground to liquid mixed with powder, the noble Snail: has become chowder.

So please, human - watch the ground, for these creatures that astound, mind your feet, for the shell-bound, genderless elite - have a care, give right of way, remain aware at night or during day..

For with eyes upon prehensile stalks, looking out for those who walk, the snails are watching - and while so slowly they may cruise, those who see you stamp - will not forget your shoes...
I was working in the garden, a desperate effort to get away from the will-sappingl, soul-sucking repetition of checking Facebook and profile sites for any sign of intelligence - and a vague attempt at earning my undeserved keep and food in the family home, when I discovered so very many bleached old snail-shells, and frequently endeavored not to crush them, even when I could see they were uninhabited.

It led to me thinking about snails.

A lot.

It helped pass the time. I have always liked snails.
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vodka-oblongata Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
aw i really like this!
love everything about it, especially the subtle rhymes
ps cute snail pic!
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Professional General Artist
I'm glad I could make you smile :)
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kilian777 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2011
Is that snail shooped? I'd love to see a snail that big.
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Professional General Artist
No, it's a Giant African Land-Snail. They're a surprisingly popular pet, and incredibly expressive in the way they move. The way they focus on things seems to imply an unexpected intelligence.
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kilian777 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011
hmmm... better log that away in my list of potential pets.
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011  Professional General Artist
Not if you're in a cold climate - they die easily in winter. Unless you can invest in and maintain a heated tank =)

They breed at an insane rate, so prepare to freeze the eggs before they develop and dispose of them, or you'll have hundreds of them within a month.
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kilian777 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011
I live in Texas. And I'll just release them into the wild.
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hannahbelle1991 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2011  Student General Artist
What a lovely little poem! I very much enjoyed it :love:

Also, snails are pretty much made of win :D
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Professional General Artist
I'm glad you enjoyed it, Lady :) Oneday I'll have to upload audio versions of some of my poems, they're really made to be spoken in a rather unique style.
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hannahbelle1991 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2011  Student General Artist
Even better! I always find it enjoyable how the poet has written it to be read, and how the reader reads it :love:
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Bloody-Scarlett Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2011
I used to love to collect those things, there was this hole in the backyard where they use to go and I would pull them out to gross out the neighbors on the otherside XD I was also scared of killing them because my dad told me the giant mother snail would come after me lmao.

But anyway..

This poem is really good, I do like what it is saying. When you think about it, it almost seems it would be nice to be a snail, but then you think about how high the chances are of getting crushed...ick, I would hate that, but at least it would be quick, in this world now we have too many things to worry about that can kill us, none of which are quick.
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2011  Professional General Artist
Being hit by a truck so hard your spine snaps is fairly quick. You just get a pounding concussive sense of numbness and confusion! ^_^

I'm glad you enjoyed the poem ;)
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Bloody-Scarlett Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2011
Well...Thats true lol Getting hit by a train usually does the trick too.

I'm glad I found it C:
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Fiarrella Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2011
I love this snaily rhyme.

I do understand what you mean about boredom and seeing intelligence. I had this exam on biophysics some months ago and I was the first ready to be put to the proverbial guillotine and the proffessor had gone out to do who knows what for an hour and a half. So I waited. And waited. And I got bored. And I had a list to spare and pencil still in hand.

And one more thing: You should rename this 'Ode to the Snail'
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Professional General Artist
It is about his gentlemanly, ever-ready qualities, Fiarrella ;) No renaming.
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Fiarrella Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011
:) It's just a suggestion. And its one of the few original rhymes I actually enjoy. Great work
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Jakari Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2010
Made me smile, nicely done. =)
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2010  Professional General Artist
*bows* Thankyou :)

Remind me to perform it for you oneday.
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Jakari Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
Perhaps whilst exploring castles?
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010  Professional General Artist
Hah! Certainly, though I may begin composing something surreal about the soul of castles in the process.

Now there's a thought..

*jams a screwdriver into his ear to interrupt the creative urge so he can go eat noodles and resume castlestudies*
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Jakari Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
Castle studies. Yes please! =p
I'll pass on the screwdriver though, thanks. :confused:
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Durian Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2010
S'like been ages since I even bothered to do anything on here...It's an interesting poem, in a flow I am not familiar with: I'm more used to the white lines and stemmed lines of equal lengths.

Where did you find that picture? Did you make it? Feels very appropriate.

On the poem: I like how you underline their gentle nature and the fact that they are some of the most harmless things in nature, yet continue to exist. If only we all lived such noble, humble lives.
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2010  Professional General Artist
Hey Nizer ^^ Aye, that photo is of a Giant African Land Snail, one of my passed-on housemates. My mother's hand holds hem.
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Sapph0 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2010   Writer
This is beautifully written. :love:
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2010  Professional General Artist
*smiles* Thanks, Sapph0 - If you'd like to hear it spoken aloud, let me know.
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ladyjinx13 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2010
I hate social sites so much...Facebook,Myspace blah there all the same. This was definetley a better use of your time...I can't beleive we still have sun...I want the rain back (I may be the only one though) hehe :rose:
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2010  Professional General Artist
*grins* I have a very limited number of friends on FB - I hate the site, but it's useful for journal-style quick bites, and for social organisation, if only you have people anywhere nearby to interact with. I lack that, but it remains potentially useful. And handy for people with attention spans as short as mine who want maximum exposure and minimum effort in a thought-blurb.

I'm enjoying the sun. This year and last gave us wonderful snow and rain.
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ladyjinx13 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2010
Hate them completley not even on one of them and thats the way I like it *smiles*...
I miss the rain, its so calming to listen to when I sleep and to splash in hehe
But I guess some sun is good for a little bit of a change...If only we could get real snow instead of ice...
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Astarael7 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2010
You have certainly captured the personality of that there snail of yours very well, Mister J.

I have always been made uncomfortable by snails, and while this poem does not make me greatly fond of them it does make me very respectful =)

You have wonderful flow in your writing. It reminds me of the poems that used to be read aloud in a deep and warm voice, on television with accompanying pretty illustrations.

If you had the patience to turn other animals into poems it would make a wonderful book. I'd adore it anyhow.

It is good to see you write again!
*happy nuzzle*
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2010  Professional General Artist
Perhaps if nothing else, I can write children's poetry of the style I read when I was a kid. That would have some positive influence, I guess.

Or create an endless loop of disaffected morbid poet-children.
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