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Always dressed, without fail, in his best, it is the Snail.

Lacking gender, call it He - Hermaphrodite variety! The snails are what they need to be, happy in equality. At the headline of society, the subject of great enmity - at the envy of the lower bug, the Snail does not mention the Slug.

Ever at home to friendly callers - in his castle dome, that grows yet taller - lives the gentleman with long, stalked eyes, his expression of polite surprise.

A pacifist he, the subject of this rhyme - he'd never kill, nor conceal the crime. Indeed, he can't - he leaves a trail - evidence leading to the Snail.

At rest, or when feeding, the best place to dwell, playing chess or when reading, he's blessed with his shell. Starting pale and soft as flesh, a slender veil, delicate mesh - with age we see the touch of karma, a harmless beast is given armour.

Indeed, he could hardly be calmer - a herbivore - of leaves a farmer. Too calm, one might say to the point of harm - for than the snail, no-one is slower... of particular consequence, in the path of a mower.

Prudent, readily prepared - knowing in the long-run, none are spared, this gentleman, in lacking bones - leaves a grander (by far!) gravestone.

... excepting that most tragic end, being brittle/lacking bend - of all, the worst, I'm sure you feel - is to burst beneath your heel. What a way, in what a world.. Innocent, in spiral curled, only to be crushed to mince, the sound alone will make you wince. Ground to liquid mixed with powder, the noble Snail: has become chowder.

So please, human - watch the ground, for these creatures that astound, mind your feet, for the shell-bound, genderless elite - have a care, give right of way, remain aware at night or during day..

For with eyes upon prehensile stalks, looking out for those who walk, the snails are watching - and while so slowly they may cruise, those who see you stamp - will not forget your shoes...
I was working in the garden, a desperate effort to get away from the will-sappingl, soul-sucking repetition of checking Facebook and profile sites for any sign of intelligence - and a vague attempt at earning my undeserved keep and food in the family home, when I discovered so very many bleached old snail-shells, and frequently endeavored not to crush them, even when I could see they were uninhabited.

It led to me thinking about snails.

A lot.

It helped pass the time. I have always liked snails.
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vodka-oblongata Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
aw i really like this!
love everything about it, especially the subtle rhymes
ps cute snail pic!
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011
I'm glad I could make you smile :)
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kilian777 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2011
Is that snail shooped? I'd love to see a snail that big.
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011
No, it's a Giant African Land-Snail. They're a surprisingly popular pet, and incredibly expressive in the way they move. The way they focus on things seems to imply an unexpected intelligence.
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kilian777 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011
hmmm... better log that away in my list of potential pets.
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011
Not if you're in a cold climate - they die easily in winter. Unless you can invest in and maintain a heated tank =)

They breed at an insane rate, so prepare to freeze the eggs before they develop and dispose of them, or you'll have hundreds of them within a month.
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kilian777 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011
I live in Texas. And I'll just release them into the wild.
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hannahbelle1991 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2011  Student General Artist
What a lovely little poem! I very much enjoyed it :love:

Also, snails are pretty much made of win :D
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Jakkar Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011
I'm glad you enjoyed it, Lady :) Oneday I'll have to upload audio versions of some of my poems, they're really made to be spoken in a rather unique style.
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hannahbelle1991 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2011  Student General Artist
Even better! I always find it enjoyable how the poet has written it to be read, and how the reader reads it :love:
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